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the bones of my smile curve too harshly.
they push up through my skin;
rupture through my cheeks.

crack open my lips in a grin
hungrier than words;
a cheshire cat
stripped of summer innocence
made terrible in blades and blood.

switchblade teeth rip holes through the still air,
knife through your heartstrings like paper.

carnal; carnage.

you stare at me with eyes pulled tight,
your pupils shrinking away
as my hands curve into claws at your side.



killer.

sometimes, i scare even myself.

the line between lust and violence is easy to blur, and sometimes it's easier to give in to that primal instinct than to hold on to innocence.


[ i'm not too sure about this one. serious critique please? ]
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KarenWanny Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2010
There are never any words that I could say that could show the complete amazingness of your writing, and you just keep improving!

[I'm so glad you're writing again, I've missed this so much♥]
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DreadRavenThePirate Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2010
As unwanted as my opinion may be, I actually think this is one of your best poems yet. To me, it really brings to mind images of Heath Ledger's Joker- and the lack of punctuation or a usual form (that I am aware of) serves to emphasise the lack of sanity.

The Cheshire Cat reference also reminded me of Alice in Wonderland coming out soon. I squee'd.
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Cheetha3 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2010
wow...
thts amazing
i wish i could right like you!!!!!
luv it
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Cheetha3 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2010
omg... i spelt write wrong :/
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HannahPhantom6 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2010
thank you! ♥ that's so sweet of you to say :hug: i'm glad you like it.

haha, don't worry, i get words mixed up all the time too xP
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